You need to read the story starter in the Pobble 365 link, download the story planner and plan your story in your orange book. The last part of the plan is the ‘Resolution’ to your story (how it finally ends or how the problem is resolved) – this is the bit you need to write as a response to my blog.
Good Morning Miss Cooley and class hope you are all ok and well.
I have just finished the Joe Wicks again Miss Cooley and about to do the story planner (i have already finished the maths) shall i draw the planner and everything in my orange book ?
One more question,you know,for the plan an ending for a narrative thing,how much do you need to wright.
Also how are you,I hope you are having a nice day!
The resolution to my story is: The Creature from the deep was sent back into the Ocean where it came from by a local young fisherman whom was the only one who understood the reason why the beast rise to life from it’s deep slumber . Jake the fisherman enlisted the help of a group of locals and together they first cleaned up the beach from the plastic, garbage left by the people and also the Creature from the deep.
You see, the beast got very angry with the people from not taking care of the Oceans ,the Creature was sad to see how underwater life was affected by people’s poor choices when trowing plastic and disposing of their garbage in the Ocean’s water. But once Jack and his friends made a promise to clear out the beach, the water and to take better care of the Ocean the Creature went back where it came from .
Hello Miss Cooley, how are you?
I can now blog but only on google chrome.
Just a quick question when I go to the white rose maths link it sends me to like what year 4 would be doing.
So I can’t do the online video.
Hopefully you can help in anyway,
Rahul
– Robert, Lary and Fred offer to support the monster.
– They want to help him heal his son and are extremely apologetic about what they did to enrage him.
– The monster agrees and all is well.
Well done Aaron, you were 1 of the fastest to blog your resolution to the story. This is your second day of being one of the first three to blog your response.
If this does not work, here is the ‘Story starter!’ that you are to use for your planning…
It came from the sea, calmly at first. An enormous, slithering tentacle slowly oozing its way over the top of the sea wall, exploring the metal and concrete shapes with suckers the size of your front door.
Then, as more and more people came, and shrieks and cries of alarm filled the air, the creature became angry. All hell broke loose…
In an almighty tangle of limbs and water and buildings and people, the beast came violently exploding out of the frothing water. The normally sturdy metal supports of the buildings groaned under the extreme weight of the gigantic tentacles crushing them. Panic. Complete panic set in.
But where had the creature come from? What did it want? How could anybody stop it?
There wasn’t time for people to think. Only to run…
Introduction:
Main characters-
-Mick (dad)
-Laura (mum)
-Kyle (son)
-Sean (Mick’s best friend)
Story setting-
-On a fishing boat, they had gone on fishing trip, viewing the carnage that is happening on land
Build up:
Developed characters and setting-
-Mick is kind but strong and has a good conscience
-Laura is always moaning at Mick and sometimes takes Sean’s side instead of her husbands
-Kyle is brave but silly
-Sean is reckless and hot headed
-The fishing boat is Mick’s dads old fishing boat, who is waiting for them on the harbor
The points that lead up to climax-
-Mick wants to go back for his dad who is in the middle of the carnage on the harbor. There is no safe way to get back around the monster
Conflict/climax:
-Laura thinks its a stupid idea because Mick is putting her family in danger
-Sean is not happy with Micks decision and argues/fights Mick which is causing problems with the small fishing boat -rocking and letting water in
-Kyle is backing his dad up and want to go back for his grandad so throws over the lifeboat and goes on his own without his mum and dad seeing
-Then there is panic about Kyle’s safety as well as Mick’s dad
Resolution
-Kyle finds a way around the monster without him seeing or hitting the lifeboat with his tentacles and rescues his grandad who is hiding in the rubble
Well done Jimi, you were 1 of the fastest to blog your resolution to the story. This is very detailed and I like the idea behind your story. This is your second day of being one of the first three to blog your response.
Then, when all the people had left the wrecked city, the giant octopus had calmed down because he had more space.He is also happy because more sea life can live now that they have more space to breed.Then a few of the people return but do not
disturb the octopus. Then my story ends.
Goodbye
Azeem:)
Hi miss Cooley,
This my resolution for the story:
The young boys mother finally found a job because of the the woman in the park . She was thankful because she can earn enough money for her child and herself .
Resolution, (I think):
I accidentally deleted the other copy.
The monster was under attack and was wounded in the battle, it swam to the surface for help but was frightened of the people with their weapons and screaming, the village was also under attack by pirates. A boy understands the Kraken and decides to help. Then tones of people come and help the creature and try to help. As the creature leaves it sees that the people are struggling and as a token of his gratitude the monster protects the people and the animal and towns people had a bond and now whenever one another needs help the other would come to the rescue. It is said that thousands of years later the village is frozen and the people are now a myth as well as the beast. But scientist have discovered it in a glacier and the monster is planned to come back to live.
I`m probably going to change bits and bobs as I write the axial story. 🙂 .
My resolution is that the giant creature only came to land to restore something someone took from the ocean so the creature came to get it back. It is solved when everyone realises that the creature is running for shinny objects only and soon notice it starts chasing someone with a big diamond. The girl/boy decides to throw the diamond as they knew it was from the ocean, once the creature realises he grabs it and slowly slithers away into the water. It took a while to fix the damages but they were relieved that the creature left.
Miss Cooley,
For the first news should I just pick any activity like I did yesterday because it shows that I think only on mondays we have an activity marked. So should I just do any? Activity?
Bye 😉
– Aidan
Hello Miss Cooley.
My ending:
When the monster took a breath the town would shake. Like an earthquake. People were screaming, running and shouting. It was havoc. There was no way a person could defat this.They had to work together. Sailors went boarded on the ships, knights went on top of the towns castle and most of the ordinary people got ready with guns. Sailors fired cannons, knights shot arrows, the people of the town shot bullets. The monster was getting weaker and weaker then eventually it had gone.
Good morning Miss Cooley i am really sorry but i don’t understand today’s challenge
sorry
Morning Anna,
You need to read the story starter in the Pobble 365 link, download the story planner and plan your story in your orange book. The last part of the plan is the ‘Resolution’ to your story (how it finally ends or how the problem is resolved) – this is the bit you need to write as a response to my blog.
Does that make sense?
Miss Cooley x
Good Morning Miss Cooley and class hope you are all ok and well.
I have just finished the Joe Wicks again Miss Cooley and about to do the story planner (i have already finished the maths) shall i draw the planner and everything in my orange book ?
Crystal 🙂
Morning Crystal,
Definitely draw the planner into your orange book.
Miss Cooley x
Ok thank you.
thank you,yes it does make sense
sorry i was supposed to say that in the thing i said.
sorry
One more question,you know,for the plan an ending for a narrative thing,how much do you need to wright.
Also how are you,I hope you are having a nice day!
Hi Anna,
As this is a plan, you will be writing in bullet-points. Your extended writing will start from tomorrow.
I am well thank you. Hope you are well too.
Miss Cooley x
thank you
Hi. Good morning.
The link for the template is not working.
Aaron.
Morning Aaron,
The planning template?
The link is…
https://all-souls-cofe-primary-school.j2webby.com/?attachment_id=3540
Then you need to click…
?attachment_id=3540
This will download the planning template.
Miss Cooley x
Good morning Miss Cooley,
The resolution to my story is: The Creature from the deep was sent back into the Ocean where it came from by a local young fisherman whom was the only one who understood the reason why the beast rise to life from it’s deep slumber . Jake the fisherman enlisted the help of a group of locals and together they first cleaned up the beach from the plastic, garbage left by the people and also the Creature from the deep.
You see, the beast got very angry with the people from not taking care of the Oceans ,the Creature was sad to see how underwater life was affected by people’s poor choices when trowing plastic and disposing of their garbage in the Ocean’s water. But once Jack and his friends made a promise to clear out the beach, the water and to take better care of the Ocean the Creature went back where it came from .
Hi Miss Cooley,
Have you seen my blog? as it shows me is still awaiting moderation .
Karim
Dear Karim,
I have seen it. I will respond after 3.30pm to let people know how they did.
Miss Cooley x
Well done Karim, you were 1 of the fastest to blog your resolution to the story. This is very detailed and I like the idea behind your story.
I will add your name to my score sheet.
Miss Cooley x
Do I need to blog the whole resolution to my ending of the story?
The ‘Resolution’ is from your plan, so it does not need to be very detailed. Tomorrow, you will start writing the actual ending to the story.
Miss Cooley x
Hello Miss Cooley, how are you?
I can now blog but only on google chrome.
Just a quick question when I go to the white rose maths link it sends me to like what year 4 would be doing.
So I can’t do the online video.
Hopefully you can help in anyway,
Rahul
Morning Rahul,
I am so pleased you can blog again.
The link is…
https://whiterosemaths.com/homelearning/year-6/
And the video is in this tab…
Summer Term – Week 1 (w/c 20 April)
It should not take you to Year 4 because the link is for Year 6.
Miss Cooley x
Here is my resolution.
– Robert, Lary and Fred offer to support the monster.
– They want to help him heal his son and are extremely apologetic about what they did to enrage him.
– The monster agrees and all is well.
Aaron
Well done Aaron, you were 1 of the fastest to blog your resolution to the story. This is your second day of being one of the first three to blog your response.
I will add your name to my score sheet.
Miss Cooley x
Hi Miss Cooley,
I am not able to do the challenge because my computer won’t let me download it or it will crash
Lorenzo
Hi Lorenzo,
Try the link from here…
https://www.pobble365.com/creature-from-the-deep
If this does not work, here is the ‘Story starter!’ that you are to use for your planning…
It came from the sea, calmly at first. An enormous, slithering tentacle slowly oozing its way over the top of the sea wall, exploring the metal and concrete shapes with suckers the size of your front door.
Then, as more and more people came, and shrieks and cries of alarm filled the air, the creature became angry. All hell broke loose…
In an almighty tangle of limbs and water and buildings and people, the beast came violently exploding out of the frothing water. The normally sturdy metal supports of the buildings groaned under the extreme weight of the gigantic tentacles crushing them. Panic. Complete panic set in.
But where had the creature come from? What did it want? How could anybody stop it?
There wasn’t time for people to think. Only to run…
Miss Cooley x
Thanks
Hello Lorenzo!
Azeem:)
Hi Azeem 🙂
Also the maths wont load either but I still did the maths papers.
Hi Lorenzo,
I think you may be having technical issues with your computer.
The links are…
https://whiterosemaths.com/homelearning/year-6/
And you need to open the tab labelled…
Summer Term – Week 1 (w/c 20 April)
Miss Cooley x
Hi miss Cooley,
How do we give you our answers for Pobble365 challenge for today?
Kapo☺️
Morning Kapo,
You need to blog the ‘Resolution’ part of your story by writing it as a reply.
Miss Cooley x
Hello miss Cooley for the challenge I don’t get what you mean by blog our resolution I can’t find it.
Oh do you mean the resolution to my story?
Yes – how is the story resolved (at the end)?
Miss Cooley x
Hi Kimberly,
Have you done the planning sheet in your orange book? – see below for link…
https://all-souls-cofe-primary-school.j2webby.com/?attachment_id=3540
Once you have done this, you just need to write a reply to me; letting me know what you think the ending of the story will be.
Miss Cooley x
um Miss Cooley when you called me yesterday to do the challenge, where should i go to do it i cant find it
Morning Arash,
The challenge is all in my blog (purple writing).
Miss Cooley x
Sorry one more thing do we have to right the story that they have already written and go on or should we just go straight onto planning the ending?
You are planning and writing the ending only.
Miss Cooley x
My resolution for the story:
They find out that the only reason he came up to the city was because he was lonely and he needed friends.
So…how will they resolve this? That is what is meant by a resolution.
Miss Cooley x
Morning Miss Cooley,
This is my story plan:
Introduction:
Main characters-
-Mick (dad)
-Laura (mum)
-Kyle (son)
-Sean (Mick’s best friend)
Story setting-
-On a fishing boat, they had gone on fishing trip, viewing the carnage that is happening on land
Build up:
Developed characters and setting-
-Mick is kind but strong and has a good conscience
-Laura is always moaning at Mick and sometimes takes Sean’s side instead of her husbands
-Kyle is brave but silly
-Sean is reckless and hot headed
-The fishing boat is Mick’s dads old fishing boat, who is waiting for them on the harbor
The points that lead up to climax-
-Mick wants to go back for his dad who is in the middle of the carnage on the harbor. There is no safe way to get back around the monster
Conflict/climax:
-Laura thinks its a stupid idea because Mick is putting her family in danger
-Sean is not happy with Micks decision and argues/fights Mick which is causing problems with the small fishing boat -rocking and letting water in
-Kyle is backing his dad up and want to go back for his grandad so throws over the lifeboat and goes on his own without his mum and dad seeing
-Then there is panic about Kyle’s safety as well as Mick’s dad
Resolution
-Kyle finds a way around the monster without him seeing or hitting the lifeboat with his tentacles and rescues his grandad who is hiding in the rubble
I hope you enjoy the plan
Jimi
Well done Jimi, you were 1 of the fastest to blog your resolution to the story. This is very detailed and I like the idea behind your story. This is your second day of being one of the first three to blog your response.
I will add your name to my score sheet.
Miss Cooley x
Miss Cooley, this is my pobble work:
Then, when all the people had left the wrecked city, the giant octopus had calmed down because he had more space.He is also happy because more sea life can live now that they have more space to breed.Then a few of the people return but do not
disturb the octopus. Then my story ends.
Goodbye
Azeem:)
Dear Azeem,
I like the idea behind your story. Unfortunately, you were not one of the first three to blog your response. Hoping you will make it tomorrow!
Miss Cooley x
Miss Cooley, my mum printed the story planer. Is it alright if i stick it in my book?
Azeem:)
Of course – I only mentioned that you should copy it into your orange books because I know that not everyone has a printer.
Miss Cooley x
Hi miss Cooley,
This my resolution for the story:
The young boys mother finally found a job because of the the woman in the park . She was thankful because she can earn enough money for her child and herself .
(I don’t know if this is a resolution)
Kapo☺️
Dear Kapo,
Is this a resolution to the ‘Creature of the deep’ story?
Miss Cooley x
Should I do the art lesson in the orange book?
Kapo
You can do it on plain paper or the orange book.
Miss Cooley x
they went to find it and captured it and is now free from terror that my resolution
Dear Jez,
A very simple plan. Unfortunately, you were not one of the first three to blog your response. Hoping you will make it tomorrow!
Miss Cooley x
Resolution, (I think):
I accidentally deleted the other copy.
The monster was under attack and was wounded in the battle, it swam to the surface for help but was frightened of the people with their weapons and screaming, the village was also under attack by pirates. A boy understands the Kraken and decides to help. Then tones of people come and help the creature and try to help. As the creature leaves it sees that the people are struggling and as a token of his gratitude the monster protects the people and the animal and towns people had a bond and now whenever one another needs help the other would come to the rescue. It is said that thousands of years later the village is frozen and the people are now a myth as well as the beast. But scientist have discovered it in a glacier and the monster is planned to come back to live.
I`m probably going to change bits and bobs as I write the axial story. 🙂 .
Dear Aidan,
I like the idea behind your story. Unfortunately, you were not one of the first three to blog your response. Hoping you will make it tomorrow!
Miss Cooley x
My resolution is that the giant creature only came to land to restore something someone took from the ocean so the creature came to get it back. It is solved when everyone realises that the creature is running for shinny objects only and soon notice it starts chasing someone with a big diamond. The girl/boy decides to throw the diamond as they knew it was from the ocean, once the creature realises he grabs it and slowly slithers away into the water. It took a while to fix the damages but they were relieved that the creature left.
Hope it’s ok?
Dear Kimberly,
I like the idea behind your story. Unfortunately, you were not one of the first three to blog your response. Hoping you will make it tomorrow!
Miss Cooley x
Also sometimes it will not show me new comments so I do not know if you have replied so I have to close all the tabs and re log and ext.
Also because of this at this very moment I can not see if some one else was faster. 🙂
Dear Aidan,
I will let you all know after 3.30pm as to who was the fastest.
Miss Cooley x
( I narrowed it down to a short piece as a summary) probably will change some pieces later if I realise a much better idea.
-Aidan
Miss Cooley,
For the first news should I just pick any activity like I did yesterday because it shows that I think only on mondays we have an activity marked. So should I just do any? Activity?
Bye 😉
– Aidan
You can do any activity, if you have completed the 2 tasks I set on Monday.
Miss Cooley x
Hello Miss Cooley.
My ending:
When the monster took a breath the town would shake. Like an earthquake. People were screaming, running and shouting. It was havoc. There was no way a person could defat this.They had to work together. Sailors went boarded on the ships, knights went on top of the towns castle and most of the ordinary people got ready with guns. Sailors fired cannons, knights shot arrows, the people of the town shot bullets. The monster was getting weaker and weaker then eventually it had gone.
Dear Yasir,
I like the idea behind your story. Unfortunately, you were not one of the first three to blog your response. Hoping you will make it tomorrow!
Miss Cooley x
Hi miss cooley,
Sorry I didn’t understand the challenge today. I thought we had to do so thing else.
Sorry
Good evenong Kapo.
No problem…please always ask if you do not understand my blog.
Miss Cooley x