Astrid held out her hands to see a mysterious shimmering, glowing light rise and rise. As she was all alone in the magical forest there was a creepy faint whistling coming from the same beaming light that was floating in front of her.
Hi miss Cooley,
This is my resolution that is up levelled:
The sun slowly sunk, the moon lightly appeared. The light sparkled, brighter and brighter it got. The girl glared at it and made a big smile, she never seen anything like it before. Night night sky emerged but she wanted to stay longer. She didn’t know what to do with the Light.
Boom!
Suddenly the light burst bigger. Her heart beaten faster and fast. She ran behind the bush. She thought and then needed something to cover the light so it doe t get bigger. She took of her coat and quickly put it over, the light went dimmer and dimmer. It vanished. The light was gone and the girl heart stop eating so fast.
This is my resolution, I hope I get one of the first today.
Kapo
Hi miss Cooley,
There is lots of mistakes in my writing so I’m writing it again:
The sun slowly sunk, the moon lightly appeared. The light sparkled, brighter and brighter it got. The girl glared at it and made a big smile, she never seen anything like it before. The night sky emerged but she wanted to stay longer. She didn’t know what to do with the Light.
Boom!
Suddenly the light burst bigger, her heart beat faster and faster. She ran behind the bush.she thought about what to do and then she thought that if she used something to cover it then it wouldn’t get bigger. She took her coat of and quickly put it over, the light went dimmer and dimmer. It then vanished. The girls heart stoped beating that fast.
Well done for up-levelling your resolution Kapo – but you were only meant to up-level the paragraph of the story below using ambitious vocabulary and sophisticated punctuation – not the resolution of your story.
Astrid held out her hands. She was alone in the forest, and an eerie silence surrounded her. All she could hear was the faint buzz, like a bee settling down on a flower, coming from the thing she held so protectively in front of her.
Make sure you read the instructions carefully, as your answers need to be correct as well as fast.
Morning Miss Cooley,
This morning I received your gift-THANK YOU SOOOO MUCH! I am going to use it today!
Today we are going to celebrate my baby cousins birthday -so I am going to catch up todays home learning over the weekend because we are going to a 2 meter birthday party with my cousin (only us but he will have fun because he is only 3) and its a whole hours walk to get there!
Have a great day!
Jimi
Good morning Miss Cooley,here is my up-leveled paragraph for the pobble 365 challenge:
Astrid held out her hands. She was alone in a dark and gloomy forest,a ghostly silence surrounded her. There was a faint buzz that sounded a bit like a bee settling down on a blossom;it was coming from the glowing orb that she held so protectively under the warmth of her hand.
Astrid froze, her fear was controlling. Then a reluctant hand plunged itself forward bracing for a
disaster. She was alone in the deep, dark, gloomy forest. The darkness howled and I noticed voices surged through the mist like a valture scowering for its decapetated prey. It suromdee her in an awful silence. All she could hear was the demonising buzz of the thing in front of her, like a curious, rapid bee settling down onto a sweet, juicy and refreshing flower. Coming from the glow she held so protectively in front of her like a kangaroo and its baby. A mystery to be opened up. Will the puzzling puzzle be filled in. Is it magic.
Byeee have a great day everyone and I hope that you are all safe. Byeee have fun!
– Aidan Yr6
Good Morning Miss Cooley, here is my paragraph:
Astrid held out her glacial hands. She was alone and isolated in the murky forest, the forest of darkness…
A ghostly silence surrounded her… all she perceived was vague drops of a slimy fluid, like thunder being heard unexpectedly, forthcoming from the mysterious item she was holding protectively in front of her…
Well done for up-levelling the paragraph – unfortunately, you were not one of the fastest to respond today, but I hope you will make it on to my score sheet tomorrow.
Astrid held out her hands. She was alone in the forest, all around her she could hear all sorts of noises, and suddenly an eerie silence surrounded her. All she could hear was a faint buzz, like a bee settling down on a flower, coming from the magic she held so protectively right there in front of her.
Well done for up-levelling the paragraph – unfortunately, you were not one of the fastest to respond today, but I hope you will make it on to my score sheet tomorrow.
Hi miss Cooley I hope you are well this is the end of my story:
Astrid started to see something in the bushes in the forest. The rattling in the bushes started to get louder and louder and louder until Astrid started to run home. She ran home as fast as she could with the thing in her hand… the magical thing in her hand. Astrid got home and knocked at the door to her mum she opened it. She said “Astrid where have you been? I’ve been so worried”. But little does she know Astrid had put the magical
thing in her pocket. She had run up stairs into her room. She put the it on the table. She had examined it and saw something she will never be unseen. It was a little person. A magical person… it was called… jeff.
I hope you like it and I had to put some kind of funny thing in it ;
Good afternoon Miss Cooley, how are you?
This is my pobble work. it is a bit late because the laptop stopped working:
As Astrid held up her hands, she felt as if a jack-hammer was shacking her hands. There, she stood in the most gloomiest dark forest ever, so dark as if someone moved the sun. Then it happened… The orb started to buzz like a bee settling on a wonderful orchid plant. Then, as she held the orb to her chest, she felt a warmth like no other race down her back, and at last
she said in an exited but puzzled voice said,” It must be magic!”
Good bye 🙂
Have a good day and good luck for your gardening.
Azeem:)
Good Morning Miss Cooley, how are you ?
Thank you for my postcard 🙂
Good morning Crystal,
You are more than welcome – I am pleased it arrived.
Miss Cooley x
Hi miss Cooley,
I just received the post card you sent.
How are you? I hope you are well and have a good time at home.
Kapomiko
Morning Kapo,
I am so pleased your postcard arrived – some pupils received theirs last week but I think the postal system has some delays at the moment.
I am well – I have been for my 5k run this morning and am busy preparing your home learning packs for Summer Term 2.
What will you be doing after your home learning today?
Miss Cooley x
Good Morning Miss Cooley,
Here is my up-levelled sentence:
Astrid held out her hands to see a mysterious shimmering, glowing light rise and rise. As she was all alone in the magical forest there was a creepy faint whistling coming from the same beaming light that was floating in front of her.
Hope it is good
Lorenzo
Good afternoon Lorenzo,
Well done for up-levelling the paragraph – you were one of the 1st three to respond to my challenge and have been added to my score sheet.
Miss Cooley x
Hi miss Cooley,
This is my resolution that is up levelled:
The sun slowly sunk, the moon lightly appeared. The light sparkled, brighter and brighter it got. The girl glared at it and made a big smile, she never seen anything like it before. Night night sky emerged but she wanted to stay longer. She didn’t know what to do with the Light.
Boom!
Suddenly the light burst bigger. Her heart beaten faster and fast. She ran behind the bush. She thought and then needed something to cover the light so it doe t get bigger. She took of her coat and quickly put it over, the light went dimmer and dimmer. It vanished. The light was gone and the girl heart stop eating so fast.
This is my resolution, I hope I get one of the first today.
Kapo
Hi miss Cooley,
There is lots of mistakes in my writing so I’m writing it again:
The sun slowly sunk, the moon lightly appeared. The light sparkled, brighter and brighter it got. The girl glared at it and made a big smile, she never seen anything like it before. The night sky emerged but she wanted to stay longer. She didn’t know what to do with the Light.
Boom!
Suddenly the light burst bigger, her heart beat faster and faster. She ran behind the bush.she thought about what to do and then she thought that if she used something to cover it then it wouldn’t get bigger. She took her coat of and quickly put it over, the light went dimmer and dimmer. It then vanished. The girls heart stoped beating that fast.
I am pleased that you are editing your own work Kapo – this is a good skill for when you go to secondary school.
Miss Cooley x
Good afternoon Kapo,
Well done for up-levelling your resolution Kapo – but you were only meant to up-level the paragraph of the story below using ambitious vocabulary and sophisticated punctuation – not the resolution of your story.
Astrid held out her hands. She was alone in the forest, and an eerie silence surrounded her. All she could hear was the faint buzz, like a bee settling down on a flower, coming from the thing she held so protectively in front of her.
Make sure you read the instructions carefully, as your answers need to be correct as well as fast.
Miss Cooley x
Hi miss Cooley,
Sorry, I didn’t read the instruction properly. I will read the instructions properly next time.
Bye
No problem – important skill for secondary school too.
Miss Cooley x
It is important
Morning Miss Cooley,
This morning I received your gift-THANK YOU SOOOO MUCH! I am going to use it today!
Today we are going to celebrate my baby cousins birthday -so I am going to catch up todays home learning over the weekend because we are going to a 2 meter birthday party with my cousin (only us but he will have fun because he is only 3) and its a whole hours walk to get there!
Have a great day!
Jimi
Morning Jimi,
I am so pleased you like your prize – it is well deserved as you have worked incredibly hard, and I am so impressed with all of your writing.
I hope you have a wonderful 2 metre birthday party.
Miss Cooley x
Good morning Miss Cooley,here is my up-leveled paragraph for the pobble 365 challenge:
Astrid held out her hands. She was alone in a dark and gloomy forest,a ghostly silence surrounded her. There was a faint buzz that sounded a bit like a bee settling down on a blossom;it was coming from the glowing orb that she held so protectively under the warmth of her hand.
Good afternoon Anna,
Well done for up-levelling the paragraph – you were one of the 1st three to blog your response and have been added to my score sheet.
Miss Cooley x
Astrid froze, her fear was controlling. Then a reluctant hand plunged itself forward bracing for a
disaster. She was alone in the deep, dark, gloomy forest. The darkness howled and I noticed voices surged through the mist like a valture scowering for its decapetated prey. It suromdee her in an awful silence. All she could hear was the demonising buzz of the thing in front of her, like a curious, rapid bee settling down onto a sweet, juicy and refreshing flower. Coming from the glow she held so protectively in front of her like a kangaroo and its baby. A mystery to be opened up. Will the puzzling puzzle be filled in. Is it magic.
Byeee have a great day everyone and I hope that you are all safe. Byeee have fun!
– Aidan Yr6
Good afternoon Aidan,
Well done for up-levelling the paragraph – you were one of the 1st three to blog your response and have been added to my score sheet.
Miss Cooley x
Good Morning Miss Cooley, thank you for the postcard.
Morning Olivia,
You are very welcome – I am pleased it arrived. It seems that some of my postcards are taking a bit longer than others.
Miss Cooley x
Hope you are well.
I am well.
I have been for my 5k run and am preparing the Year 6 home learning for Summer Term 2.
I may do some gardening later but it is going to be very hot!!
Miss Cooley x
In stead of writing ‘ noticed voices’ it is meant to be ‘unoticed voices’
Good Morning Miss Cooley, here is my paragraph:
Astrid held out her glacial hands. She was alone and isolated in the murky forest, the forest of darkness…
A ghostly silence surrounded her… all she perceived was vague drops of a slimy fluid, like thunder being heard unexpectedly, forthcoming from the mysterious item she was holding protectively in front of her…
Thank you for the postcard!
Adyan
Dear Adyan,
You are more than welcome – I hope all is well with your Dad.
Miss Cooley x
Good afternoon Adyan,
Well done for up-levelling the paragraph – unfortunately, you were not one of the fastest to respond today, but I hope you will make it on to my score sheet tomorrow.
Miss Cooley x
Astrid held out her hands. She was alone in the forest, all around her she could hear all sorts of noises, and suddenly an eerie silence surrounded her. All she could hear was a faint buzz, like a bee settling down on a flower, coming from the magic she held so protectively right there in front of her.
Good afternoon Kaimberly,
Well done for up-levelling the paragraph – unfortunately, you were not one of the fastest to respond today, but I hope you will make it on to my score sheet tomorrow.
Miss Cooley x
Hi miss Cooley I hope you are well this is the end of my story:
Astrid started to see something in the bushes in the forest. The rattling in the bushes started to get louder and louder and louder until Astrid started to run home. She ran home as fast as she could with the thing in her hand… the magical thing in her hand. Astrid got home and knocked at the door to her mum she opened it. She said “Astrid where have you been? I’ve been so worried”. But little does she know Astrid had put the magical
thing in her pocket. She had run up stairs into her room. She put the it on the table. She had examined it and saw something she will never be unseen. It was a little person. A magical person… it was called… jeff.
I hope you like it and I had to put some kind of funny thing in it ;
Good afternoon Jez,
I would expect nothing less of you!! You are a very funny young man.
Is this your response to my challenge today or the ending of your story?
Miss Cooley x
Miss Cooley did you receive my challenge answers that I sent at 9:12?
Ok bye 🙂
– Aidan
I did…but like I said yesterday, I will not respond to challenge responses until after 1pm to give everyone a chance to take part.
Miss Cooley x
Good afternoon Miss Cooley, how are you?
This is my pobble work. it is a bit late because the laptop stopped working:
As Astrid held up her hands, she felt as if a jack-hammer was shacking her hands. There, she stood in the most gloomiest dark forest ever, so dark as if someone moved the sun. Then it happened… The orb started to buzz like a bee settling on a wonderful orchid plant. Then, as she held the orb to her chest, she felt a warmth like no other race down her back, and at last
she said in an exited but puzzled voice said,” It must be magic!”
Good bye 🙂
Have a good day and good luck for your gardening.
Azeem:)
Good afternoon Azeem,
Well done for up-levelling the paragraph – you have used some lovely vocabulary.
It has been a bit too hot to do any gardening – I may do it tomorrow instead!
Miss Cooley x
I was asking because the blog was not working on my end, but luckily it is now.
Have a great afternoon and evening!!!
No problem.
Hope you enjoy the rest of your day.
Miss Cooley x
Hi again Miss Cooley,when I write my story can I do something different from the plan that I did yesterday?
If you feel you can make the ending better, please do.
Miss Cooley x
Would I have to write a different plan?
No…you will be editing your story tomorrow anyway, so you can always leave it until then.
Miss Cooley x
Ok thank you. I will write my changed story today anyway and then edit it tomorrow.
Have a good day!
No problem.
Miss Cooley x